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Tuesday, 17 November 2020

100 words challenge

 Hello readers today in wananga we have been doing the 100 word challenge the. Today in the 100 word challenge we are writing about a magical bubble that can travel anywhere you want.

There was a bubble that was sitting in the dark misty room waiting for someone to take it. BOOM there was a robbery shooting everywhere people dying their towels crying because there house in get bombed. the robbery dived for the bubble and went back in time to 1870s robbery was in the town walking has like he did not get shot in the shoulder from the cops there was a lot of blood. He got fixed by the bubble and he went back three minute past the time he got court and he change the way he acted that night 

2 comments:

  1. hi Angus it is tane
    i like how you port the dark mist
    i like how you port the night and stuff like that

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  2. Good jod Angus. Your story is good but some of the things don't make sense. There are some spelling mistakes and there s only one full stop. Apart from that its a good story. Good Job

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