There was a fire on the port hills people were evacuated from their houses. From crashing and making piles of broken houses. I saw Humungous hot chunky smoke. It look like earth was making another sun because of the fire. Ash was floating in the air waiting for people to suck it up. Boom! A helicopter crashed and sadly he died. All of his family would be sad as it sounded like he was a great man.The burnt trees, grass and houses were pitch black like the night sky
You used some fantastic words to help me see the fire in my mind.I especially like the part about making a new sun. That really made my mind go wild.Paragraph would make it more easier for the reader to read. Keep going.
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